Comments : Into the Heart (Battle)

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very impressive. I really liked this poem.
    The flow went beautiful, and the rhyming
    didn't seemed forced at all. I couldn't find
    any mistakes at all. God bless 5/5
    <3Tay^__^ily

  • 17 years ago

    by Marcus

    I really like this
    Interesting story
    nice flo
    and everything fits just right

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem. Very nice:) 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Very nicely written when I read this poem for some reason the first thing that came to mind was Harry Potter lol wierd I know...but you still did an amazing job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    "Yet if it is the battle that you win
    And you tear the walls apart
    You will win the glorious prize
    And conquer the childlike heart"
    ^ I love this stanza. :D

    I think you did a great job, with this poem. I loved how it was story like, actually. Usually I don't, but it worked out with this poem.. Because the flow was good, and the rhyming was quite great.

    5/5.
    <3

    Thanks for the comment,
    and it was a poem about a lava lamp that broke, Lol.

  • 17 years ago

    by Alex

    Very cool indeed! I like how you're talking about the chess game thing. Very interesting. This poem could mean lots of things.

    5/5

    ~Alex~

  • 17 years ago

    by Faded

    It had mystery in it, it made me think and guess. it wasnt just words put together, there were 'medaphors' and i liked that. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Another great poem by you, you have proved your great talent once again,
    this was greatly written yet full of emotions and sadness.
    keep it up
    a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Simply Josh

    Very nice job and I enjoy reading poems that sound like a story. Quite a few of mine do. This poem gave me a vivid image of what was going underway and being felt. Keep writing. 5/5
    cheers, josh

  • 17 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    Great imagery and description throughout this fluent poem. what i liked about it was how it was story like but still flowed like a poem, it seemed to end with a sense of resolve and hope which made the poem all the more effective, loved it. xx

  • 17 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    Beautifully expressed,i relly like this, 5/5 hun. i love the part that says:

    A heart so soft and loving
    Locked up in walls and chains
    Into the empty halls you will find
    Whatever else the heart remains

    love it!! keep up the good work!!!

    x

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Ohhh my... I adore this!
    I was completely hooked by the end of the opening stanza, and whilst I didn't want this to end, I wasn't disappointed when it did, as you ended it so perfectly.
    The flow is flawless throughout, and the imagery created vivid pictures for me.
    The wording was a treat to read, as was the whole poem.
    You did a truly wonderful job with this.

  • 17 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    Very good.. the flow was great.. 5/5 keep up the awsome work!

  • 17 years ago

    by honeypot

    Well done, the flow and meaning of this poem was great!
    Iliked it that it told a story, an it was noble and thought provoking.
    Great work! x

  • 17 years ago

    by freedom

    I think you did really well i didnt understand certain things but it was stilll good 5/5
    tiffany

  • 17 years ago

    by Austin

    A very perculiar poem..i havnt heard one quite like that before...none the less wonderful read and i loved it...5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow... very nice choice of words the flow was great as well as the way you made a story like vibe out of your emotions, a nice touch .. good job:D

  • 17 years ago

    by Seronum

    Great read! 5/5 keep it up! i like the style and flow in this. bravo

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    I really admire girl ur worlk1 its really have a great flow and it was amazing coz u have a great imagination at ur age.. keep it up5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Greg Beam

    Wow that is great! good flow and good word usage. a lot of meaning and emotion in this poem. keep up the great writing!