Wow, i loved! this poem. i like how you used "not so common" words to describe the feeling and the poem itselft. the rhyming was so unpredictable and so well thought out. the flow stayed great throughout the poem. once again, great choice of words. it definitally made the poem.

Stunning write. You did a really good job. Your word choice was absoultly brillaint.I loved this peice. 5/5

I especially liked the first verse, the rhyming didn't feel forced at all unlike some poems. I liked how the more unusual words still fitted into the poem and made sense, 5/5

You're writing is astounding. I read your first stanza and already knew you had a gift. Exceptional write and you are an execptional poet. You tied your words and emotions to create a beautiful piece of art and for that, I give you a 5/5

I love this poem..it is very powerful and yet still very beautiful...i loved it even though i had to look up like 4 words..lol
i still thought it was wonderful!
great job
keep on writing!

love,
~shannon~

A very power ful poem which is written greatly.....
deep meaning...........
great job and a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.
the only sugustion would be lines are too long, you can separate them up if u want to.

Hey!!.......it's beautiful.........just great!!...very well penned!!..good job!
xxPoojaxx

Wonderful write. The imagery was good. The flow as well as the structure of the poem was excellent. I loved your word choice and the way you worded it. You are talented, keep it up.

Peace and Love, Joe

You have wonderful vocabulary I must say!
It's like I've seen and heard words in your poems I don't normally hear which was really cool.
I really enjoyed this poem because it was so dark and it wasn't the same as everything else I've been reading!
Wonderfully written
peace kaila

I enjoyed this poem. The vocabulary is wonderful - from what I can see, you have an amazing sense for words that jump off of the page.

I wasn't, however, overly impressed by the flow of the poem...I AM a fan of
trickily-flowing poems, but I found that the flow of this poem was a bit on the dragged out side. Maybe the lines were too long...I think if you cut back on the length of each line, it would allow the poem to keep it's nature, but sound more pleasing.

But, to each their own.

Good job!

Woah ur poems are so amazing and the words are so...smart lol i really really like them!! u have an amazing talent!!!! well done!!
5/5
luv Falllen

Wow....cooolllll