Comments : Empty Arms

  • 17 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    This is hauntingly beautiful. It could be about so many things, which makes it possible to touch so many people.

    The line breaks make you read it slowly, which emphasizes your sadness or hopelessness.

    Looking at it grammatically, I may not be reading the meaning you intended, but it seems like "lingered" should be "lingering".

    Great work.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    How sad this write is. The imagery is fantastic. Word choices great.

    Dreams abandoned
    To empty arms

    These lines really touch the heart
    Love your sis Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Barry

    Sadness is when dreams come to nothing
    but we can still dream ....some dreams can come true........

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "Dreams abandoned
    To empty arms "

    What an ending.. it was so poignant and leaves plenty of room for interpretation!
    Excellent as always m'dear
    Never expect anything less from you
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Sourav

    Short and very thoughtful poem. Just magnificent!

  • 17 years ago

    by XxMoonLightxX

    This was short and to the point..i liked it..it confused me the first time i read it which makes you wanna read it again and again till you get it...then when you get it you wanna read it again to feel more of the emotion from it
    very very good job!
    5/5
    if you get teh chance check out a couple fo my poems

    thanks much!

    luv,
    ~Shannon~

  • 17 years ago

    by Renan

    Nice peace of work, very sad writting.. But beautfulll.

    "In a lover's gaze
    Broken stars fell
    Softly dying
    As wishes slumbered
    In the dormant light"

    arhh, nice writting.
    Good job
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Navy Blue Heart

    Wow that was really beautiful, I loved the imagery you used like the idea of the moon being scarred. The length was perfect as well as it maintained the atmosphere.

  • 17 years ago

    by chavii

    A vert heartfelt poem sad but beautifully written. captures the pain in each line.

    Chavii.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    This is one amazing piece. So beautifully penned and hidden in meaning that it can touch any reader. Wonderful work

  • 17 years ago

    by Lesbian Natalie

    I really like this ... yay....5/5... check mine out...

  • 17 years ago

    by Barry

    So very beautiful..........hauntingly
    surrenders to sadness....
    Very beautiful, very deep..........

  • 17 years ago

    by SiLeNtLy ScReAmInG

    Sad, but a really beautiful poem. I especially liked the part about broken stars. This was very deep.

  • 17 years ago

    by lildevilslayer07

    That was a good poem keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Milla

    So short yet so powerful!
    great job one of my favs. the sadness and anger is so amazing...ugh brings me back to hard times...LOVED IT!
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by The Sky is Falling

    Very good I loved this poem. You show your feelings very well. Written amazingly 5/5
    Check out mine please

  • 17 years ago

    by Darkening Dawn

    Really nice...good flow and work choice...i really really like what you've done. You're a talented poet

  • 17 years ago

    by BrokenHeartStillBeat

    Its sad but pretty. Feeling is everything.

  • 17 years ago

    by Shad0w0faPh30n1x

    Your poetry runs deep debbie, i mean it, short but this is so great, love it, another 5/5!!! keep them comming!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    Lines are short, description yet to a minumum. different and exciting. well done.

    5/5 David