Wonderful job. Though it was very heartbreaking to read. I'm sure that there are many who can relate. The flow was flawless, the emotions were powerful, & the story was good. Well done, keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Ohh so powerful. I just love your poems, they flow so well, this is wonderfully written and always [[=
Carissa
P.S. i hope you never had to go thro any of these things and if you did, i hope the man got what was coming at him.

Wow.
Although this seemed
A lot like a story.
I was impressed
I saw the image in my mind clearly.
I love this poem.
5/5 =]]

Ah this was sad. i don't like this poem. well i mean i don't like wat happened in this poem. i don't want it to happen to anyone. yet i know it does go on. well done with describing this to everyone. well done.

5/5 David

I dont really like these kind of poems...not how it is written just how, what the story is like in it, none the less great write 5/5

I liked how you repeated the humming in your head part. Made it come out nicely. I hope this wasn't a true story. Sad that this has to happen to people. Over all, it was good.

-TonyTRADEMARK

Vanessa,

That was a heartbreaking poem to read. If this is true, I am sorry. Though I can relate. You have the ability to write all kinds of poems - you've got alot of talent. Everything about this poem was wonderful, keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

I say, good write. but try to expound on your vocabulary. its like your ryhming is forced. i can almost tell waht the next word your rhyming with will be before ive read it. but thats not to say its bad. (:

This was good. wow. i can relate. keep it up

This was a great poem in sturcture and flow. The words were very well placed. But on the other end, I felt it alittle too defeating for my taste but great write none the less I gave you a 5 Plot121

Wow!
vanessa this was a deep poem. if this is true i m so sorry, but u r a strong person to let all this out on this website. u r a wonderful writer and keep on doing wat ur doin.
always
Chantel

This poem is a wonderful poem that describes what so many have gone through. thank you for finally puttign a voice to what many of us only wish we could without nightmares returning.

Wonderfully written and easy to relate to. hope this poem was not true. you have expressed what alot of people have been through. excellent.

Great poem. I don't see people can so inhuman tward others. Threre just animals they don't care about anyone but them self. Anyways I loved this poem. 5/5

That was a very sad poem.. very deep.. and great images from the words. This was very powerful. 5/5

Wowwwwwwwww what a powerful poet ur
i can actually feel every word you amaze
me . as far as the contents im here to take a little piece of your pain away, for every word
i read i feel ur pain so please believe me
thats a little more you have to endure.
cy

The only criticism I have for this poem is that the rhyme scheme isn't constant. Some rhymes are perfect and some are not.

Still, I can't see any way of changing that without changing the meaning of the poem. Overall, this poem was great. Definitely shows the reader the meaning-- almost shoves it in their face. Nice work!

I like how "you wrote there is a humming in my head" twice in the poem its a nice touch .. the poem was for some stanzas disturbing and sad and hard to read.. im sure you know which ones i am talking about.. besides that i think this stanza sounded great

"I only feel his touch

a little forshadowing.. the only line i didnt like was

"Just don't ever tell
Or I'll see you in hell"

i know that it rhymes and it makes sense.. however it seems as if you only used it because it rhymes and works.. i think more could be said by maybe finding a different way of saying it.. i dont know maybe its just me.. i just dont like how it sounds

5/5!
It may sound corny, but I had a little tear roll down my cheek.
I really hope that this poem isn't true, for it is a horrible thing.
And if it is, please understand that you aren't alone and that there are plenty of people willing o help you through your difficult times.

Just don't ever tell
Or I'll see you in hell
[I don't know why, but I liked these lines.]

Now. This is almost the worst cliche poem I've seen. But, I really liked the ending. It's just that.. "He grabbed me and stuck it in" really kills a rape poem because it's so over used.
Try not to be cliche; use different ways to express how you feel, different words.
Use punctuation; it'll help the flow.
And the rhyming is verygood.
Oh. May I suggest structured forms of poetry? I bet you'd do well with it and it would get you away from cliche. I don't know, try it.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5