She Never Understood the Lasting Pain

by Vanessa   May 11, 2007


She never understood the lasting pain
He left her crying in the pouring rain
Endlessly yelling in the rising wind

Never wanting to see him again
Emotion is in control of her entire soul
Violence is all she would ever know
Emptiness is all that she can feel
Restless nights seem so unreal

Untimely he did so depart
Never letting go of half her heart
Dried blood still on her wrist
Every cut for everyday she missed
Realization is so unfair
She can still see him standing there
The memories are ones that last
Only holding pieces of her past
Opening her soul, she begins to weep
Dreading all secrets she's forced to keep

The more she fears death is on its way
Hiding in the shadows, from the light of day
Entering in only her horrid dreams

Leaving her with silent screams
Anger you hear in her voice
Shows she has made her choice
The end is not so far away
Insane she has nothing left to say
Nothing could stop her, ready to die
Getting her self ready to fly

Painlessly grabbing her blade
Admiring the cuts she had made
In every attempt to forget his face
Nothing could take his place

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    ''In every attempt to forget his face
    Nothing could take his place ''

    Those lines...wow. They blew me away, they were so intense and filled with so much depth.
    Flow was once again flawless throughout the entire piece, the opening really pulled me in and from there on it just got better and better.
    The ending was beautiful and elegant, really hit me hard.
    The fact that this was formed poetry as well made me love it even more.

  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    "Opening her soul, she begins to weep
    Dreading all secrets she's forced to keep"

    -Again, you have woven thematic terms wonderfully in this piece. You have a good sense of rhyme and are able to apply it well to your words and the message in this poem. Well done :).

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Wow, such strong emotion expressed here. I really felt dreadfully sorry for the persona.

    I liked the flow, too. Despite the different length of the stanzas, it flowed really well.

    Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Great poem...lovely work!...u expressed emotions deeply in this 1..and lol..the title itself wa attractive!....painful and it's touching..all in all....Nice write!...kp it up!..5/5!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Well time may come....to realize and understand evrything so maybe she needs a time and space to to think all of her confusing mind... great showing and epxressing ur emotions.