Unsightly Blemishes Deep Inside My Soul

by Vanessa   May 11, 2007


Unsightly blemishes deep inside my soul
Nothing is really in my control
Selfishly do I hid from my pain
I feel nothing but the shame
Guilty of a terrible unforgivable sin
Hiding the decaying demons within
Trusting, no one my secret to keep
Leaving my soul only to weep
Yarning to put out the brilliant fire

Burning within a soul of desire
Lasting forever, an unsightly scar
Endlessly wishing on a falling star
My dreams are broken, shattered
It destroyed everything that mattered
Still standing alone on top of the hill
Hiding in a time thats no longer real
Eaten alive by fear, and deceit
Stinking of death, she lay at my feet

Dead is the child that lived within
Embedded deeper with the sin
Engraved with such shallow fear
Pain that I have held so dear

Indifferent now to all the beating
No longer numb, but bleeding
Still living in a private hell
I have learned to do it well
Dead half of a tortured soul
Everything that I used to know

Murdered when innocence was slain
Yet I wonder aimlessly in pain

Scars that run only soul deep
Only enough tears to weep
Underneath the falling rain
Lesions on the soul left from pain

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  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    "Lasting forever, an unsightly scar
    Endlessly wishing on a falling star
    My dreams are broken, shattered
    It destroyed everything that mattered"

    -Excellent. Beautiful imagery throughout this piece, and you look into the theme of devestation in a profound manner. Very well done :).

  • 16 years ago

    by Black Princess

    Once again you left me speachless.. well done all your poems contain sooo much emotion its fantastic and i adore you work keep it up can't wait to read more!! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Excellent work! I love how well you rhyme your poems. Some lines here, like:

    "Dead half of a tortured soul,
    Everything that I used to know."

    ^ Brilliant!

    Nice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    "Dead is the child that lived within
    Embedded deeper with the sin
    Engraved with such shallow fear
    Pain that I have held so dear"
    Lovely lines....beautigully penned!...Great work on this 1!!...kp writing!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Kelsea

    Ok. This poem was good throughout, though there a few things I would like to point out.
    There are a few spelling mistakes, kind of, with missing letters.
    Hill and real don't really rhyme all that well.
    "Dead is the child that lived within
    Embedded deeper with the sin"
    In the second line, the with makes it sound a bit redundant. Maybe chose a different word?
    Aside from those, I think You did a great job. Your words are well chosen, and nothing seems too out of place.
    Cheers!
    Kelsea

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