This is an amazing poem, the words are excellent, you find words different then what everyone else uses (I'm guilty of using the same words :P) and there is so much emotion in it! Overall it was an amazing poem! :D

5/5

Very true i agree with your message through this wonderful poem, sometimes beauty us farce.
nicely done
keep up the great work and a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it

Good poem.
It flowed well and the emotion was shown.

'Wishing I could wash away my memories of you...
Like love letters scribbled in the sand during high tide.'

Beautiful 5/5

[Sarah]

I loved the message or story line of this poem
I can agree and relate to it
I liked the end it was really good
The words you chose usually worked
Great job!

Overall this is a great poem... I'm sorry I can;t give you an in depth comment, I just can't really get into love poems. But your word choice was excellent!

Excellent work....beautifully penned words and soo filled wth emotions and the message conveyed was great too..
"The cold of hate, the cold of oblivion envelopes us, caressing me
Gently guiding me away from your arms."
So beautiful lines...very good vocab!
Kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

Beautifully written, the line, "The cold of hate, the cold of oblivion envelopes us, caressing me
Gives this poem so much depth. the imagery was clear, the emtion was powerful, the word choice was simply amazing. keep up the good work. 5/5

This was amazing.. the only thing that i can find is maybe if you put these into stanzas it would be a bit easier to read. other then that the flow and rhyme were good.. i give this a 5/5

This a very well done poem I loved the flow and the message was loving and almost to the point I felt moved good job can't wait to see more Plot121

Envelopes = lol dear, are you going to seal you both and mail yourselves to Australia? Hee Hee (envelops)

Okay, the words FARCE totally ruined the poem for me. Most indefinitely that it angers me. You had the most perfect poem going for me, and I came to that word and I could have nearly flipped out at such a bad word choice. You BETTER change that word, cause this is going on my fav's ... but never use the word FARCE in a love poem

Great job,
5/5
~Stephen White

That was so pretty it makes me wonder and think about so much, it makes me want to cry, but i wont, dont worry, lol i am adding you to my favorites now...keep it up, never stop writting or i will cry!lol

OMG!! i know how that feels and i know it hurts but everybody has to get through it!!!

Wow!
this is a really good poem...you have
very good vocabulary and good use
in words to show what you feel...very good!
:]

To tell the truth it lost my attention and I could not finish it. It wasn't that it was boring just a bit cliche even though you tried adding poetic expressions I think you just went into too much details about what it meant. Maybe next time leave it at cold or whatever you had used instead of saying it was hate eveloping you ;) Keep writing

This is a good pome did it really happen??

Excellent piece of poetry... 5/5

The word farce... I like it. The piece overall was creative and emotional for you at least. I'm not sure if this is based on personal experiences or not it's hard to tell when so many people just write to ryhme. Regardless Great piece. Maybe sometime you can check out the few pieces I wrote and comment to see how I can improve because your writting is admirable

This was beautiful...I particularly liked the metaphor that you used in this.
Flow was good throughout the entire poem, and the imagery you used in this was beautifully done, it creates vivid pictures.

Wow this is really good I loved the last tqo lines. They spoke wonders about the person in your poem and about the relationship its self. This poem was amazing because it tells the story of a one sided love with such passion and feeling. I loved how you described it, the metaphores were beautiful. I loved how each word rang with love and with hatred. A definate 5/5 from me for managing to display those two conflicting emotions so flawlessly.