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  • 13 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    I really liked it, the flow was great and your ryhming wasnt forced at all, and i really likes the concept, good job, 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Black Princess

    Nice work, i slightly disagree with Steph i think it was a lil forced at times but still nice outcome, ending was great loved it. Enjoyed it and very interested in reading more of your work keep it up. : )

  • 13 years ago

    by Miu

    Amazing one:) I can tell you are improving. Like the words and your endings are always very touching. Keep up the great work :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    WOW I can't believe you're only 12 years old! you have real talent! keep it up! well done! another 5/5! I enjoyed this poem! :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Your talented for 12 years old =D imagine what you poetrys gonna be like when ur older. Well done with this nicely written dark poem emotional and great to read. Good work~mel

  • 13 years ago

    by Hunter

    Your sad poems are beautiful, great work! and thanks for the comments! i really needed some, i felt ignored by people! 5/5!

  • 13 years ago

    by Hunter

    Your sad poems are beautiful, great work! and thanks for the comments! i really needed some, i felt ignored by people! 5/5!

  • 13 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very well done! The flow was
    absolutly flawless and the poem
    didn't have a mistake as far as I
    can see. God Bless 5/5
    <3tay(^_^)

  • 13 years ago

    by Leah20

    You're only 12? You have a very good vocabulary for a 12 year old. Good start, keep writing and trying to improve your rhymes. Keep writing!

  • 13 years ago

    by x Mo x

    Wow. Thats a truly great poem. You penned it so well; the flow, the wording, everything about it is great!

  • 13 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Simple yet effective. powerful lines, perfect flow, great wording, deep emtions. I liked this one a lot. I have no construtive crtisim to offer for in my eyes this is perfect. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Your word choice was simple but yet everything was portrayed nicely. The emotions seemed strong, and i loved the word crystallized i don't see that too much in any poems. Well done~mel

  • 13 years ago

    by Jessica

    This was really good. I loved the simple structure and yet it still held so much meaning. The flow was good, the rhymes worked, and the emotion clear. Nicley done. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Even though the rhymes seemed a little forced at some times, this was wonderful to read. you're a very talented writer, and only 12 years old! that's amazing! but good job with this... 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Ash

    Excellent..

    "This misery I felt before
    does not compare
    These crystallized tears
    are becoming so bare"

    I liked this part and can relate to the whole poem. nicely done.. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Really osm write!!! keep it up

  • 13 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    This was amazing!!How well you have written this!!I can realte to it so well.
    Good job in this piece!!
    Best wishes
    And take care.

  • 13 years ago

    by Brittney

    To only be 12 this poem is great. There were certain parts that did seem to be a little be forced. It was a great poem though and the imagrey was amazing. Loved it. 5/5
    *Brittney

  • 13 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    Your poem gave me goosebumps! short but to the point, very nice. good job <3

  • 13 years ago

    by Debbie

    Nice to see how enchanting this piece is. Your words, though they never conjured mental images, certainly generated certain heartrending feelings and emotions. I believed it is the major highlight of this poem. On the whole, this poem was written quite well and sound. Nicely done. 5/5 ~Debbie