Comments : Discarded Damsel

  • 13 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    This poem fel t like it was missing something.. it not you. its me.. but it feels emotionless.. for some reason.. I love the choices of words.. but I cannot help you to find something that is missing.. althoughwise you will never learn to become the better poet than you are now.. so that is for me to say and for you to figure out.. so good luck, good job, and keep up with your good work!! love it 4/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Leah20

    I interpreted your poem as a father, maybe a king, dismissing his daughter from his sight because she did something terribly wrong, possibly involving a boy. I really liked this poem great job!

  • 13 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    There is so much packed into such a short poem. Falling out of love on one side of the relationship while being madly in love on the other side. Tis a painful thing. Most people can realte to that in some way. 5/5 for sure!

    Much Love,
    .:Danielle:.

  • 13 years ago

    by White Chocolate Dynamite

    I liked it, it was short and got a point across, probably the best short short poem I have seen on here, but I havent been on here that long lol..
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem. Another 5/5.

  • 13 years ago

    by x Mo x

    Wow....That was very poetic (duh its a poem, of course its poetic), but what I mean is it was straight out enough to make the point, but it didnt beat the read (me) over the head with the point. The words you used were very imgae making. Well Done!

  • 13 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow, i think i have to have a dictionary in my hand to read your poems, but as always your poems are so inspiring because you are one of the most talented writer.
    you never disappoint me with your great works,
    keep it up dear.

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Your vocabulary is amazing, so unique. Well done on such another amazing poem. your flow and imagery was flawless
    well done
    xxxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Beautiful, open piece of writing. The topic is clear, but the message and the tone are both quite open to the readers' interpretation. Wonerful job.

    5/5

    [tragic]

  • 12 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Lol I think I need a dictionary to read this haha.

    Anyway that was a superb write. Your choice of words is like a magic trick, it really amazes me. Your vocab is excellent. You're truelly talented.

  • 12 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    I love to read poems and find their meaning, This one is the saddest and most appaling to my heart.
    I see a young Damsel caught in Slave trading,
    and the Dispicable bartering going on between buyer and seller. A price is set and The Damsel is purchased for his own lustful satisfaction, snickering, cold hearted as he carts away his new Sad Love Toy,
    Like chaffs driven away
    by the gnashing wind

    Peace and Blessings