Decaying Death

by Vanessa   May 14, 2007


The stench of decaying death,
Inhaled with every single breath.
The foul oder perfumes the air,
"Hello, Is anybody there?"

Blood running down her face
"Am I to die, alone, in this place?"
She ran water in the rusted sink
Facing a broken mirror to scared to think.

The sickening sweet sweet smell,
Of reeking secrets she won't tell,
Is making her stomach turn sour.
Sitting there hour after frighting hour,

Hiding inside the bathroom stall,
Within this ancient ungodly hall,
Trying only to forget her intense pain,
Head bowed, she cries with shame.

Suddenly there is a rush of fear,
Somebody is coming "I'm in here!"
She yelled before she had thought,
"Please don't leave me here to rot!"

Her plea is carried by the rising wind,
Answered only by demons living within.
Remembering being attacked from behind,
Cluttered images in her troubled mind.

Brought to this ungodly hall,
Pushed inside the bathroom stall,
Held, while beaten and raped.
The savage had already escaped!

Unaware of being locked inside,
She is alone, and terrified!
Head throbbing from loss of blood,
Tile floor, tracked with dirt and mud.

Her dress ripped, her body bruised,
"Please help" She cried "I've been abused"
Her words would not carry though the wall,
Trapped inside her bathroom stall,

The door now open, he creeps in,
Visions of raping her over again,
Not wanting to believe it is real,
On her neck is cold, sharp, steel!

Feeling it cut though flesh and bone
She is dying, but she is not alone!
Letting the darkness bring peace,
Her brain functions begin to cease.

No one noticed that she's not around
Three months later she is found,
The smell of decaying death,
Thickly inhaled with every breath.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Twisted16

    Wow again I liked this the best so far

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Again a very poerful read. One thing ive noticed about your poems - there ALWAYS really really powerful. Well the reason i chose to read this poem is becuase of the title. You used aliteration and i immediately notcied this. "Decaying Death" also made me intrested in what the poem is about. You had a good rhyme scheme going on hear. It worked nicely. The first two stanza's togerther create this horrror story image. "sickening sweet sweet smell" this part you used a long alliteration as well as repititon. Togerther these make the reader remember this part of the poem. Quite strong. The discription in this poem are really vivid. Creates a brilliant image. I loved your vocabulary it was once more really powerful. I loved the entire feel of the poem. Really powerful. Excellent usage on alliteration throughout the poem. To improve i suggest you use a more varied punctuation pattern. Keep it up! xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Amazing one. Imagery is so powerful. Poem is both horriffying and captivating. Vocabulary was great and flow was good. Obviously one of your best write. Keep up the great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    This is one of the best poems that I have read on this site. It deals with mature topics, stated in a manner that is both horriffying and captivating all at the same time. I've dealt with a lot of death recently too, as I was a relief worker for Hurricane Katrina and worked with the police, so I understand the scent of death that you so perfectly describe. Excellent work, well deserved 5/5.