Laura
Very intense emotions in this poem. I love the repeatition of the Yesterday I was, Today I'm not.
Keep writing.
Take Care Cindy

Well done, the first two stanza's ended differently, great poem, yet this can not describe it, well done is not enough.

trully superb doesn't come close, times it by a million and you'll be getting there.

5/5 David

Very nice.. i like this one alot. the flow was very nice.. but i thought it felt kinda forced. over all good job. 4/5

Amazing will be an understatement...it's beautiful perfect...lovely work...it's filled with intensity...perfect vocab...lovely choice of words.kp it up!
5/5!
xxPoojaxx

This was an awesome poem laura. I really liked the repitition of the line Yesterday I was, Today I'm not. I thought the use of it was very good. I've gotta say the third stanza confused me a little bit though. Other than that Awesome poem. 5/5

I loved your usage of repition on this poem. It helped the floe of the poem. Anyways i liked the structure of this, it was quite short yet an enjoyable read anyways. Now your rhyme scheme... well in the secound and third stanza you made every other line rhyme. In the first stanza you didnt. That kinda made the flow skecthy, but like i said before the repition helped it. Anyways the poem as a whole was quite an emotional read. Your words kinda told a story, and a sad story at that. I liked this alliteration you used; "alive and ace" it kinda sticks in the readers mind. Overall a good poem, but it could be improved by making the first stanza rhyme. Oh and use a more varied punctuation usage. Keep writing! xx

Thats is a beautiful poem. its very good! i loved it!!! deff a 5/5!!!

xo kisses xo

Very well done yet again Laura. The repetition worked very well and gave more emotion in the poem. This was a great read.
cheer, josh

Was someone that = someone who

was,Today I'm = was,( )Today I( a)m

Forever,( )I

was,( )Today

COMMA'S require SPACES after them =] Just letting you know! =]

That will make erase all the don't = the order is screwed up. The line seems unreadable.

am,( )tomorrow

Well written, dear. Remember, spaces after comma's!
I don't really have anything else to say. Sorry about the first comment, I accidentally pressed comment.

5/5
~Stephen White

I liked the rhyming it gave the poem a nice strong flow. I really liked the word choice and the format I think was just right. I gave it a 5/5.