So my fave of yours Debbie!
Your language is so gorgeous and i loved the whole tone of this poem.
Especially the last part, for some reason it made me smile. Don't know why, i think it was the scoundrel bit =)
Whoa! I like this - what a twist on the conventinal gooey love poem! Usually I'm annoyed when people try to get away with saying things like "thine..." but you've done it quite well. You captured an already eloquent era very creatively. I know I'm not much older than you, but I still have to say that your vocabulary is exceedingly developed for a teenager. Or an American. : D Or maybe you're from Australia... Very good work. The last two stanzas were brilliant.
(One question: you have "Yet as touch is as cold." Do you mean "his touch?" "Your touch?")
Wow.... great job i think there may be another Shakespeare on the way lol great job you did a wonderful job and thanks for your comment i had made a typo about the guides part i had it written on paper as guided lol well thank you again and great job on this poem!!!:D:D:D
May the azure that lingers
Around thine eyes be as blue
I loved the choice of words in this one..i liked the twist in this one...great work!
It flowed smoothly and tyhe vocab was superb!
This poem starts out like a pretty average love poem but it has a surprising twist at the end, which is rather good. The choice of words was again strong and the imagery was perfect. Excellent work 5/5
The transition and contrast from the first 2 stanzas beautiful seemingly perfect romance to the third stanza's "winter's snow" is really effective and just really truthful how love can be amplified in strange ways..
i honestly love reading your work, and i'll keep checking back.
Again, a perfect one. i cannot find enough words to describe how great are your poems, as each one of them has its own beauty and its own great message.Yet as touch is as cold
as the winter's snow,
I shall shudder and cry
in contemptuous fear.
so beautifuly penned.
in this one i really liked the part
16 years ago
by Tara Kay
I love reading your work, because you use such amazing vocab. your imagery is really awesome.
another great write
You write such intelligant and beautiful poems that I don't see myself ever comparing to. Lol. You have strong use of vocabulary words and just wonderful structer with your writing. Well done. I enjoyed your poems. Thank you very much for the comments. God Bless 5/5