Aww taht is so sad..... but nicley written

WOW haha I didn't expect it to end that way. Lol yeah I know the title. er Anyway it was really good! Sad but very beautiful. "Use your heart but also use your mind" anyway haha flow was flawless well penned! 5/5!

Aww.. this is soo sad.. when i first started reading this i had no idea the ending was going to be the way it was.. it was wonderful because i love surprises.. lol :D.. the flow was perfect and the word choice was wonderful.. you created an emotion so available to be felt by your readers with your words and i didnt want to stop reading

Wow..i soo love this 1...i relly did!!=)
it was sad though yet beautiful n nice...the word choice was amazing n the flow was flawless..
tk care!5/5=)
xxPoojaxx

There's something = there is something (assists with the flow)

Wonderful poem. Once you get into the poem, you find you have to reread it with the newfound flow. i loved this poem actually, and although the subject is very cliche, it seems that you went upon writing about it in a unique way which is awesome.

Very well written, non-corny love poem =]

5/5
~Stephen White

This poem is very cute, yet reflects the paradox of romantic love. The details give the poem a real feel, and I enjoyed reading it 5/5

I really like the good choices of words, and pl;ues Im a big fan of rhymes.. and I really liked how you made your poem flow.. it stuck toa a point and had a smooth ending good job. and keep up hte work ... 5/5

Alright job, not my favorite poem, but it wasn't terrible. Try to improve on your rhymes. Keep writing.

The mystery was all over the poem..but you shouldn't give up fight,ng in life to have what you want..the flow of it was liquidy and the punctuation was well
Good job,
Laura

The flow was kinda rough but still a great piece words come out and speak to ppl and that is an amazing talent

laura

That's beautiful. Great rhythm and the way you put the words together was good.
5/5
.x

Beautiful! I loved the beginning, how you described such a sweet and innocent love, it was very refreshing. And then I enjoyed the dark side of it also and the last sentence was just wow. The poem altogether was a joy. Well done you are truly talented and are going into my favorites *5/5*

Another great piece of work! and i bet that was hard realizing u werent the one!