Breath

by Midnight Sun   May 24, 2007


You come from behind me
Resting your head on mine
Your arms around my waist
Carefully taking your time

You pull my hair back
Away from my blushing face
You softly stroke my cheek
As my outline you trace

You move in even closer
So close I can hear your thoughts
I feel your breath inside my lungs
And in this moment my heart you caught

Your right hand sits comfortably
On the very small of my back
Your other hand's in mine
Slowly we move to the third track

Our feet in smooth rhythm
So fluidly we danced
Never wanting the song to end
Wishing to stay forever entranced

Written for a contest...please r/r/c! Thanks! :)
~Midnight Sun

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  • 12 years ago

    by SilentRebuke

    I loved the third stanza. especially the line: i feel your breath inside my lungs

    really shows two people becoming one :) great job! i actually like the fact that you only fully explain whats happening (dancing) toward the end... draws you out till the end.

  • 12 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    I LOVE the line, so close I can hear your thoughts!!!! Great imagery there but in your 8th line....I would take out the word "every" because it tosses the flow around. Other than that, beautiful job!
    Charisma*