Nice poem
I loved it
Nice flow
It had a rhythm to it.
Title was catchy
Second stanza was my fav
Your rhyme scheme was good too!
overall nice work!
Well Done

Keep Smiling xx

Oh wow that is so sad and sweet! so very touching deep and heartfelt, made me cry! =[ lovely poem 5/5
nuff luv xx

Hey,
Thnaks for your comment and your website. :)
ANyways i felt htis poem was realy quite intresting. Imean honestly i thought it was baout suicide but i did wonder why it was in the life section rather then the sad/depression section. The the i love life dearly makes me wonder what the poem is about. The last stanza well i didnt like how you let the "and when" overflow into the next line. The structure oculd use some work. But it was a good read. Keep it up! xx

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Personally, it didn't really strike me as a completely well written poem. The poem did not flow, and it seemed overly choppy and in some area's it seemed slightly corny. I have seen and written many poems like this myself, and it would help if you explained what kind of contest and the rules of the contest at the end of the poem because otherwise it seems odd and just plain horrible... I don't really know what else to say, except maybe try tuning your emotions so that they are more personal, rather than trying to be the best =]

Still, nice analogies and metaphors, and I did enjoy your title =]

Good job,
5/5
~Stephen White

The fourth stanza is strange to me. The rest of the poem is wonderful. I really ejoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. 5/5

marcella

Excellent!

i got twist..whoah..its awesome, the impact to me is great..truly emotional..i love every lines so meaningful

keep it up!

What a beautiful poem that captures such an essential facet of life!

The only thing I'd have to say threw me off a bit was the abrupt ending, but that is a judgment of creativity and it was still very good. Great work!

Well, I hope you won something for it. It's a really great poem. 5/5

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Well, I hope you won something for it. It's a really great poem. 5/5

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I like this piece a lot, it is powerful, captivating and very effective. The flow is flawless in every part and whole poem is written greatly.
Very original, too.
Well done!