Very well done.. mabye a few more words would make it eaiser to understand but still very well done...
keep up all the good work

A very good poem... the flow was great...keep on writing... thank you for sharing your talent... :)

This was really said. And although it was short, it held alot of emotion. You had a good flow, and nothing seemed forced! Great job!

Oh it was so dark and so blurring...on this one you did a real good job..and the flow keeps you going

Well done
Take care,
Laura

Everyone else is telling you how to perfect your work or how absolutly fantastic it is well duh its fantastic you postd it and
4 it you deserve a **HUG** lol
and a gummi bear but i cant over night one to you!