First stanza- the last line kinda confused me but the first was really good
second stanza- loved the last two lines very good and original
third stanza- the last line was really good I loved it the question part was good
fourth stanza- it would make me nervous to I love how I can relate to the last line
fifth stanza- wish it would've continued but still ended strong
5/5
kaila

This is fabulous. the wording and imagry you paint for the reader is amazing! the love and dedicatino is perfect.

well done and plz keep writing, 5/5 David

I love your poem really sweet and meaningful 5/5 Steve

Beautiful poem...Lovely work...the choice of words was wonderful and the imagery was perfect!
Like all your works,THis one also had it's beauty and perfection!..Filled with lots of love!
5/5
Tk care!
xxPoojaxx

Your work is very well penned obviously other people have noticed your talent as you are a published author.

I know the pain of falling for somebody that you could never have, but the truth is we can't control that. You just wish you could wake up and forget that you even care, it's a lot easier to fall in love, then to fall out of love. Excellent job 5/5

I loved it, well i'm sure you've heard the saying "love is blind.". sometimes, it truly is, as is this case. you'll figure it out, and maybe that's the problem you've already overcome and i'm coming in late (as i always do), but i have confidence in you that you'll work it out, you are the amazing goran! lol. i can't imagine you doing anything but right. i'll talk to you soon, and great poem, as always, another masterpiece :D.

Hmm. the message was clear and al, but this wasn't your best work. i understand that a lot of times poets spill there hearts into a poem, but the structure and grammar dont roll along with the message. i found grammatical erros and such throughout this one. reread it and see if you notice anything.

=]

Oh and as for the advice...

this probably isnt too great, but here are some options:

a. steer clear of her if possible
b. let her know how you feel
c. somehow tell your heart she can't be yours.

best of luck.

This was rather delightful to read, despite of its seeming technical errors. Secretly loving a person, who is apparently commited to someone else, is killing me as well. I have known about that feeling thoroughly for more than five years now. But I hope it will dwindle as time passes.

I liked this! Thanks for sharing. =]

Debbie

I dont know what to say about it, but not your type of poem for sure.

This is really sad. so many people have to see the ones they love be married to someone else. its one of the hardest things. bery great poem 5/5

xo kisses xo