Hey,
this poem has an amazing flow, I'm sorry that you had to move alot of times and I hope that you're happy with you brother, as far as I have read your work I think you brother is an angel, love your work, 5/5
kisses stephanie

Sounds like you kind of had a rough time for a while lol Don't worry though your stronger as a person now for going through the pain. I'm glad you found a place to stay where you can just be yourself, nothing like family. Great job 5/5

Wow, i love the style you used, it tells an amazing story without giving it that corny feel, very very well done..i love the rhyming scheme you used..great work!

Great poem. It had an awesome flow and was full of alot of emtions. Having to move from house to house must be hard on anyone. Life is defiantly a pain in the butt sometimes. Anyways I loved everything about this poem. I gave it a 5/5.

I love the flow and emotion. Im so sorry that you had to move alot and its great that your brother let you stay with him well keep up the good work

Christina

This poem was /amazing/. This one had excellent rhyme, excellent flow and an excellent storyline. I could feel your emotions the whole time, I could imagine what must've been going through your head. At the lines

"Looked at mum, avoided him, tears in my eyes
She looks away, he's a prick, she believes all his lies"

I almost cried, and at the end I /did/ cry. =p Great poem, I loved this. One of the best poems I've ever read online. Definitely 5/5!!!

Whoa, rough. Must be very tiring to keep moving on and on but just like the saying "You don't cry on spoiled drink" and "Move on". 5/5

Wow, loved the flow and the style you used. Im sorry you had to go through that, at least you're happy now. Well thanks for sharing that poem with others, its inspiring.

Hugs and kisses, Ally g. xo

This was a very strong emotional poem, yet very to the point. I loved the rhythm and flow of it all. Every line was really well written. I loved how there was so much pain in one poem and then in the end you were able to bring it together to create a happy ending, and one that actually hits you and makes you think wow...! Good job and keep up the amazing work

This poem was amazing, It had me interested from the very straight expecially since I read "broken Hill" seeing as I live in australia I knew where that is. This poem held an emotional story which was portrayed beautifully with a sweet eneding. I liked the structure of the two line stanzas it made this poem look neat and effective. The ryhme was good and the flow flawless. Well done on an exceptional poem~mel

Out of all the poems I have read of yours this seems to be your best in message and form I enjoyed this alot and the story line was well done congrads greaat job Plot121

Awww wow, thats really good. sounds like you have had a lot to deal with and i admire you a lot and im glad i have read your writing and will continue to do so. im glad you settled down at last you seem like a very strong and very talented person xxxxxxxxxx

Thats realy good and great flow i feel bad that u got kicked out if i got kicked pout i would have no where to go so ur lucky