The flow was only off a little in the last two lines, other than that one or two of the rhymes felt a little forced, maybe that could be making it sound off t you. Other thatn that the flow was good, the word choice was excerllent the emtion was deep and the message was clear 5/5

Wow. i enjoyed this poem thoroughly. the wording was captivating enough for me to read only the first two lines and say to myself that i wanted to finish it. i kept it in my faves just to book mark it, but it turns out that im keeping it there.

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5/5!

I really enjoyed this poem. it had some sort of hold on me. the flow was nice up until the end but other than that, it was great. i love this one. great job. great way at capturing this emotion.

Even though I'm not really a fan of love poems- I can relate(somewhat) to what you are saying.
(red eyes) *cough cough*
um well, I thought it was pretty good!
ansd what are you talking about, the flow and rythm is fine!
good job

Wow and excellent poem well done
xx this is a great love poem
xx

Wow this was so sad & touching. Excellent, I loved it. You really captured the emotions.
It's definantly going in my favorites =] I read some of your other poems, you're a great writer. Keep up the good work hun!!