Cheated women

by Xx trying to be strong but only just holding onxX   Jun 6, 2007


As she lays her head against the pillow
thinking on what she has done
what she has hurt how the man she love's
is heart broken after finding out that his one and only has done the thing that he has most dreaded that he never thought that would come never knowing that this day would come....

she tells him that she has cheated that she has been lying to him ... with not knowing what she is to do next
with tears running down her face as she is saying to herself that it was never meant to happen, that she was never meant to do this to him

without a word coming out of her mouth as she doesn't want this to end... she doesn't want to to be over with the man that she most love's....

inside of her she really wants to tell him cos she is sick of keeping this from him... sick of lying to that one man that she love's....

as she slowly tells him what she has done wrong... telling him that she has been cheating on him with someone that is close to him... someone that he know's ,

as he is angry and is yelling at her... screaming at her telling her that its over that he is finished with her ... she is crying and yelling at him... screaming that she is sorry that it wasn't meant to happen it was one night she screams saying that she was drunk and not knowing what she was doing....

she told him it was cos you where never hear that she had no one to pleasure her... cos he was never home never there to give her the things that she needed.... loneliness in her heart and soul and body...

she was saying that she was sorry crying to the ground... as he hit her to her knee's making her bleed making her cry more and more... as she go's into a silent fade thinking to herself... saying in her head that she should have never done it as he keeps hitting her for what she has done to him as she has made him angry.... he hits her again and then he walks out of the house driving away in his car... really angry and pissed off....

as she is still on the ground with blood and tears running down her face.......

this is not true but i had to write it

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  • 18 years ago

    by XxWorthlessxX

    Wow. amazing poem.
    i really liked it.
    very good.
    5/5.
    `-jackie.

  • 18 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    Really good. 5/5

    Ravyn

  • 18 years ago

    by Startle Me

    What she has hurt how the man she [[love's ]]
    It's loves

    First stanza.
    Forced and out of flow.

    Eck.
    This is... chaotic.
    There is a bit of structure on this poem.

    A poem as long as this NEEDS structure.
    Without it, it would just be... well, blah.

    All in all, I thought this poem was kind of dramatic.
    But that's probably because I know that this would never happen to me.
    I don't know.
    I just can't empathize with your character.
    Sorry.
    I'm going to vote a three.
    Do you want me to or do you want me to leave it?

  • 18 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This poem/story was really heartfelt and held strong emotions I like how it was portrayed. Really capturing. The lines were long which I liked but the structure seemed just a little hard to read. Other then that I really enjoyed this. Well done~mel

  • 18 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Better that it isn't true, but heartfelt the same, this story/poem was exceptionally well written only a few mistakes (we all make them)
    someone that is close to him... someone that he No's No's should be knows
    Hear should be here
    other than that this was excellent to read, a diffcult peice though it appers to write. I hope that made sense. Really well written, keep up the good work 5/5

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