I liked this one, you are so talented.
There was emotion in this poem, that breathed from every line.
Keep writing
much love, Tara-Kay
x

I like the imagery created in this poem. The emotions was raw. Fantastic work! choice of words was good! keep it up! 5/5!

Miu,
I liked the layout of this poem, it looked good which is what caught my eye initially. I really liked the two full stops straight after the first two lines. Like your making a point, and you voiced those two points well. It made me want to read on. I also liked how you told a story throughout it, that was really effective and the sadness in the story you told was apparent and heartfelt. It ends on a sad tone which is almost regretful in a way, i felt regret for the parents, and for brother who never took a chance to care for this poor little girl. I ALSO liked how u gave the girl no name apart from "little girl" that was brilliant because it emphasises the whole identity of her and the fact that nobody cares enough to aknowledge her.
Maybe i went too deep? But i loved it =]
Geo
If you can, please comment my latest.
Take care
Geo
xoxoxox

A very moving poem. Points for style! 5/5

Her big brother is just never there.
Little girl, she is only nine,
She does not know what death is,
Still she wishes to disappear.

wow dear its flawless. Superb 5/5 of course. I love the rhymes its so adorable.

Wow this is outstanding. The flow is great plus the beautiful rhyming words. You got it 5/5

Awwww. that was so sad. i visualized all of that, and ah. that was brilliant. 5/5.

Wow this was really good, i loved the way it flowed and the words that you used. Great poem.
5/5

Oscar

How do u get ur poems to be like that?! i am in awe! plz tell me ur secret, i wanna write just like that! see my poems and r/r/c plz! but ur poem....just WOW! 5/5

I liked the wording here and there and the point you made was so true and so sad..But grossing:crossing
,or Is it how I thought

But I really liked the story here
So awesome
Keep it up,
Laura

It was very sad. it brought a tear from my eyes. great work i will must give you 5/5.

becasue in very short story you have expressed alot of thisgs.
and my friend this is called talent.
i have noticed that you have great talent. you should carry on yo great job. take care
5/5

Really really good i loved it = ] 5/5 from me.. the ryhme in it and the flow with the words was all great... the word choice was wadnerful too = ]

This is another great job by you, you have written this so greatly, the sad emotional in the poem made it more special and makes your reader to want to read it more in detail, great job as always.

Hm.
Cliche. I'm not a fan of that.
But.
I'll give it to you.
Because I could <feel> the emotion rather than it be cliche <and> and I don't <feel> anything. So. I'll give you that.

I think it was your discription that made it feel emotional, for me. But. Your flow was off, topic was cliche, and the rhyming was a bit cliche.
Sorry, doll.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

An unique poem, I really enjoyed reading this. The vocab and descriptions you used created really good imagery. I could imagine the little girl walking across the bridge so clearly. The style in which this is written was really effective for this poem too. Well done. =] 5/5

Tammie

I really liked this poem. The flow was very good..And you did excellent with describing everything. 5/5

I really liked this poem. The flow was very good..And you did excellent with describing everything. 5/5

Very good poem i felt as if i were in it because of your choice of words. 5/5 goodjob

Very detailed, made me think , was really sad, your wording was great and was enjoyable gave you 5/5

O...that poem is sikk man..luved it..write some more....that was reli good..bye xx