The Darkest Nights

by Vanessa   Jun 11, 2007


The cimmerian gloom, entered into my bleeding heart
My entire superfluous existence was slowly torn apart
I still hear the reverberation of your blood curdling scream
"Please somebody wake me from this horrible dream"

On these, the darkest nights, the emptiness is surreal
Nothing can suppress all the ruefulness, that I feel
The loss of you was almost more than I could bare
On the darkest nights, I wish only that you were there

The teardrops fall, quietly as I stand, over your grave
I whisper to myself "damn you for trying to be brave"
He held tight to his gun, knowing you were unarmed
I prayed that you would escape completely unharmed

On these, the darkest nights, the emptiness is surreal
Nothing can suppress all the ruefulness, that I feel
The loss of you was almost more than I could bare
On the darkest nights, I wish only that you were there

The images of carmine blood, spreading across the tile
Haunt me until no end, my soul weeping all the while
The bullet that ripped though the air was meant for me
I wished that you had stepped back, and just let it be

On these, the darkest nights, the emptiness is surreal
Nothing can suppress all the ruefulness, that I feel
The loss of you was almost more than I could bare
On the darkest nights, I wish only that you were there

* I wrote this for a contest, tell me what you think*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brittini

    Great job once again your vocab was great and so was the flow and it really should be a song. just amazing keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Cody r

    Cool

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This was excellent. The flow was just perfect and the poem as a whole had a great mixture of emotions. Great wording, too. Keep up the good poetry.

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is another great poem by you, as always your poems never disappoint me with its value. you are such a great writer and i think i have told you that before.
    i really loved the emotion and the word choice in this one.

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Alright!
    Now THIS is poetry.
    Kudos.

    Now.
    First complaint: I'd say use punctuation. It'll really help the flow and get the point across better.

    Otherwise.
    Nicely done.

    Your wording was very nice on this, and maybe a cliche topic, but I didn't <read> it as cliche. Which is excellent. I'm really picky.

    I also liked how you kept repeating that one line... "On the darkest nights". It <really> made the poem.

    Nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5