A Seaside Image

by dollwithafrown   Jun 12, 2007


I wrote this for my English class.

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Rays from the passionate sun
Fall on the golden sand like glitter.
Each castle stands tall,
Before the energetic waves crash them down.

The noise from the raging water
Echoes along the shore,
As the laughter from young children
Erupts all around.

Bright green palm trees
Mark the corners of the beach,
As people dash from all directions,
Like magnets, gasping for shade.

A light airy breeze whistles quietly
As the evening draws near.
The seaside becoming calmer, peaceful;
The pale sky turns darker.

A contrasting state of tranquillity
Is the image flooding the seaside now,
And as the last few people begin to leave,
The sun sets for yet another day.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Nicely written.

    The peaceful setting brought forth by your pen (and imagination) was wonderfully vivid. The pitch was wistful and emotions relaxing and unruffled. Hardly any nature poems I've read on this site managed to achieve a desirable effect from me than this. I truly enjoyed this piece. Simply beautiful.

    Marian

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    A beautiful poem you have here. So descriptive, it created perfect imagery in my mind. Vocab well used, and flow flawless. I like that it didn't rhyme, it really shows that poems don't have to rhyme to be great. A really enjoyable read. Well done, I bet your teacher was amazed. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Mo

    Hmmm... I do feel a bit homesick now after reading that!! :) The imagery was perfect and I could literally see what you were writing.

    Brilliant poem - I love reading nature poems - not too good at writing them however! :)

    Mo
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Yay!
    :]

    I love nature poems and I have to say this is the best one I have read in awhile now. Your imagery was great and your word choice was really good as well. You didn't really skip around at all, I love this lol. I'm just blabbing because I was let speechless after reading it.

    5.5
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Georgi

    This flowed perfectly and the rhythm, srtucture, layout, it was all perfect. not only did it SOUND good, but it LOOKED good on the page which is really important!! the imagery you conjured in my mind was flawless and descriptions and vocab was also brilliant!
    i loved it
    well done =]
    please could u comment and vote on my latest poem "your subconscious choir" thank you =]

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