See the Creature

by dollwithafrown   Jun 13, 2007


Yellow fangs, so very grotesque,
This can't be real, must be a burlesque.
This must be a joke, please people start clarifying,
No, it's true, and deeply terrifying.

Pale blue skin, with a hint of red,
Eyes of darkness; a relation to the dead?
A tail so long, ten metres or so,
A beak on its face, similar to a crow.

A gigantic roar erupts from its mouth,
So grumbling, scary, extremely loud.
Where did it come from? Did it just have its birth?
What's making it wreak such havoc on Earth?

Nobody moves when its eyes meet yours;
They must obey it, of that they are sure.
No one knows how it works, no one knows what to do,
Has it been around for ages? Is it very new?

All that anybody has to offer to us,
Something of which is a must:
If you see this creature coming your way -
Get down on your knees and start to pray!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this...you had me hooked right from the first line and from there on it just kept getting better and better.
    I found this original and unique in concept, a refreshing read.
    Flow was flawless throughout the enitre piece and I loved the ending, I thought it was very intense.

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I feel like I have seen the creature by the way you describe him, your imagery is vivid, the word choice was excellent, This peice is really quite chilling, I enjoyed this as my first read of the day, well written, poem you have here. perfect flow, I couldn't think of anyway to improve this that hasn't already been pointed out. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I LOVED the way you explained the creature in full detail. Most people would just explain it in a line or two but you dedicated well over half the poem to the explanation, and it worked in your favor. ;] One thing I noticed, though...

    "A tale so long, ten metres or so,"

    ^^ 'tale' should be 'tail'. The way you have it now is like saying "My Grandpa told me a fishing tale once, twas about the first fish he caught." lmao, horrible example, but hey, just thinking off the top of my head here, Lol. Anyways, other than that - flawless.

    5.5
    <3

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