Nice! Well I hope she/he didn't pick up on purpose. Dast Xosh!

Ah your love for her is amazing, i hope that she just wasn't home so didn't know that the phone had rung. thats what we all would want to think.

great poem. flowed well. 5/5 for sure. David

Goran, Such an amazing piece you have written here. The beauty which it held was quite amazing. A beautifully sad poem which was heartfelt capturing and emotional. Well done with writing this I truely enjoyed reading it. ~Mel

Goran this was a sad one, but I can feel that this is a true story and words are out right from your heart, by now i really know when something bothers you and i am sure tonight that person upset you that is why you wrote this. I even emailed you asking if you could give me some time for an interview with Ogan journal, they really want to hear from you again.
please let me know if you have time tommorow if not let me know when is a good time.

It rang, I waited = It rang, I waited.

rather then = rather thAn

A voice said= A [Different] voice said

hang =hung (remember, stick to the tense you began with...)

is me? = was me?

You didn't think
It was necessary? = kind of an open ended ending... somewhat of a TOO much open ended ending. I enjoyed this, but it seems to have too many pauses in this poem, and also you need to add some punctuation. The spelling is well done, but there are a few err's that could do with some touch-up.

Good job,
5/5
~Stephen White

Aww. i could feel the hope you had in getting the girl to pick up. there were a few rough spots because of the tense you used. overall it was nicely done.

=]

Awww that was cute goran, really nice. great job i loved it. really great write yet again.

I can relate to this poem I loved it. You have such talent. Maybe you could expand your thoughts in this poem but it is fine the way it is if you dont want to change it. 5/5 rating.

This is a great poem. It brings out a stern feeling of wanting, with a well produced, but not perfect, flow. I felt a real - validaty from the poem, like the narrator is still living it in his/her mind. The last stanza ends the poem definitively, but, somehow leaves much more for the reader to ponder. Maybe you can add some other characterization of the person you are awaiting, so we can decyfer what that person was doing when they weren't answering you.

Great poem, really; and, keep at it.

Dear,
it say it all how should i know what that person was doing while she ignored me???
it is a story, true story... when you want to be part of someone s happiness at least by a phone call, maybe some second of word exchange, yet the other party doesnt feel you are important enough to even exchange some words with you through a phone call.
I wish i knew what she was doing so i could share it...

thanks alot for the comment though.

This peom is so awesome i know that feeling all to well wondering why she didn't answer

This was great.
I like how almost everyone can relate to it, or has been in a similar situation.
And ofcourse it's a crappy feeling.

This poem was well written, and i enjoyedreading it. Great work :)

I really like it think its really easy to connect to! theres nothing else i can really say because this is a different style i have never seen so i thought it was really good!

Great poem i quite enjoyed reading it i will continue reading your stuff u are real talented o and thanx for the comment

It was nice

I cant say anything ... just great 5/5 keep your works and stay your heart as lovingly as what you are lol....

Gene Ross

I really do like this poem i also too hope that he/she didn't pick up on prupose.Well keep righting you are a great writer 5/5 job well done :) goodbye please do "Now Its ur turn"