Hey,
I like your vocabulary, and the subject of your poem, but I think that the first line sounds better if it was: here comes the rain,,
and I dont really get the clue of your poem, but that could be just me..
anyway I still think its beautiful so nevertheless you get a 5/5 from me,
kisses stephanie

"Here come(s) rain"

"All are pol(l)uted by your beautiful lies.. "

You took my breath away with this stupendous piece, m'sis. I'll have to admit, in comparison to your older works, your art in writing Poetry has excelled to a great extent. Reading this earnest piece further induces a deep, sorrowful sensation within me, along with the slightly plaintive atmosphere -- simply amazing. It's so beautiful.
How I adored this piece!

(^^,)

I'm looking forward to read more of your works. I hope you all the best and take care!

Love,
Debbie Cakes

This was beautiful Tormy. I really loved it. Such a simple breath taking piece which you portrayed with sheer emotions. From your older work you have definitly come a long way. Well done on writing such love poem of high standards amazing. ~mel

Great poem I enjoyed this one

Wow its really good! I love it, the ending was perfect! keep it up! 5/5!

My favorite stanza:
Its that starry night
Just Like the ones
when we lay under them
Counting eachother's heartbeat..

Ok... it's well written but bit vague...

Amazing poem so beautifully written cant wait toread more :)

ashleigh