Amazing job!.. captivating!!

Oh, it seem like a movie sene,lol. specially indain movies where the guy and the girl run away all the times.lol
this was another greatly written poem by you. keep it up

This was a perfect picture. It seemed quite like a story to me. The poem flowed nicely really breathe taking and capturing. I've read a few poems with this title I'm guessing it come from a contest or so on. This was a creative piece. Really beautiful. Well done~mel

Wow, I love this poem :).. it had a perfect flow all the way through, and it was very easy for me to picture what you was talking about in my mind, I absolutely love it.. keep up the good work
-Tylor

Very descriptive and amazing true thought was put into this poem and your work showed continue to write because you are very good

laura

I thought the flow in this was very good throughout, despite it not rhyming.
Imagery was again wonderfully painted with a beautiful opening and a powerful ending.
At times though, I thought this seemed more like a short story than a poem.
Apart from that though, I think you did a great job with this.

I don't like this one as much as your other ones but good job.

your servant:
david