by Ben Jul 4, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
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As the couple lay on the sand |
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A shorT buT beautifuL piecE 5/5 brilliantlY penneD. keeP writinG! |
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Truly great description in fact superior i was able to paint a picture in my head but needs more transition and sounded like talking kind of 4/5 however i liked it maybe u can read one of mine. |
by NinjaGirl
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A beautifully expressed poem 5/5 i liked the repetition of "as the couple lay on the sand". keep writing! |