Comments : Story

  • 13 years ago

    by BehindThisSmilex

    I love the ending, honestly.
    great poem.

  • 13 years ago

    by Debbie

    This piece seemed to me to be a major rant of a troubled individual. I liked the idea of a hesitant subject trapped in between the gap of doubt and conviction, whereas I wasn't trilled with its overall development and tone of voice. I liked the six concluding lines. It further portrayed the subject's bitter struggle on whether to trust the other person or not. Yet I noted how the ending was much compelling than the beginning. Plus, the flow was quite... uneven on the whole.

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poetry seems to written from experience, yet it would fit well in a novel,
    keep it up

  • 13 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow. now that was venting. it was a great piece. long, i now see why it says story, but to tell you the truth the end was much better than the beginning. but still a great write.

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This to me really isn't your best. It seemed quite like a full on story then an actual poem. Although the meaning behind it was expressive it really didn't hold my attention. the start lacked emotion but the ending did start to even it up. The flow was uneven to me. It seems like you go what you had to out which was really good but I just couldn't feel any emotion what so ever. To me it's a 4/5

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