This War

by nobody truly knows me   Jul 6, 2007


I travel slowly through my mind
as i struggle to fall asleep
i become trapped inside
before i realize i've gone too deep

my demons come to challenge me
i recoil back in fear
slowly i start to back away
not wanting them to be near

suddenly one runs at me
pushes me to the ground
i struggle to get away
but i'm effortlessly held down

the rest come and surround me
my hands and feet are bound
reluctantly i give up the struggle
and lay warily on the ground

i feel them lashing out at me
with their barbed words and violent blows
i curl up in a ball
and scream as the agony grows

i feel myself being lifted off the ground
i begin struggling once again
the pain is almost blinding
but i can't just let them win

their bruising hold somehow tightens
making me cry out in pain
i've achieved nothing but exhausting myself
my fighting has been in vain

we arrive at a huge metal cage
they throw me in and lock the door
i feel myself losing hope
i'll never win this war

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  • 16 years ago

    by viraz vitalia

    Love it just love it is all I can say

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I thought this was very heartbreaking to read and yet written so beautifully at the same time...I loved the ending stanza, I thought it was very intense and hardhitting.
    The only thing I can suggest with this is to try and eliminate some of the fillers (I, and, you etc) at the start of your lines, it will make the flow perfect.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kristina

    This was a great poem you have written here. i liked it a lot. it flowed so nicely 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 16 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    I wanted to cry, It was so emotional, and I luv metaphors, so you know i luv'd this poem. :3 keep it up chicky. 5/5

    ps: check out some of mine if you get the chance. ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by Lovesick 4 Jesus

    WOW WOW WOW. That is beautiful. U are amazing!!