Comments : Piece of Betrayal

  • 12 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The flow throughout this was really different I did like it though, As I read it I read it with a calm and slow flow which i'm sure was your intention to create this piece that way. Emotions perfected. Loved them alot you really wrked them into the poem well. A good effort. Well done~mel

  • 12 years ago

    by jason

    Wow i must say this is among the top three best poems without any rhyming i have ever read its ahrd to do a poem that catches my interest without ryhming but you did it great poem 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by SuicideQueen

    From this day I lie
    falling in the endless pit of darkness,
    as I try to fade away from this place
    and be in sweet rapture.

    this stanza was really good
    the whole poem flowed and had some kind of darker meaning
    fantastic 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow!!! You are so talented... This poem is great, I really like it. You described emotions excellently, it is unique and atmosphere is superb. This piece truly deserves 5/5