Oh my gosh.
:] That was so beautiful.
The emotions were so strong, the flow was great, && overall, it was just SPECTACULAR. :]
"But when its hard to breathe, Ill be the fresh air that keeps you on solid ground
And just like the beauty in your eyes, you can trust me to always be around
Any hour of the day, throw on my cape, and be with you through the night
Just promise me you wont cry, for your tears have become my kryptonite"
^ Wow. I just adore those lines. You're a wonderful writer, keep it up. 5.5 :]
Beautiful free verse penned you portrait here, so heartfelt write yet breathtaking! you've a gift that no many have.... "There is no stimulus like that which comes from knowing that others believe in you. There is no investment you can make which will pay you so well as your effort to scatter sunshine and good cheer where ever you are. As water is to a flower... So is praise to the heart of another." Beautiful done!
Lol, nice poem, I found it a little hysterical actually. Only thing I could say is just watch your syllable count, how much syllables in a line, try not to have too many long lines or else it gets tyring for the reader to read, and i think thats what happened in the middle, but good job though, keep it up.
This is an absolutely amazing poem sisco!!! definatly very emotional and i hope that you publish your works some time. you are an amazing writer... as i continually tell you, and your work is unbelievable!!!