That was truly great description sad too 5/5 h

Such a sad poem

i love how you said the bullet broke the silence of the room. the imagery created there was great.

well done
xoxo

A very good poem, nice imagery 5/5

just need to correct a few spelling errors =)

I liked this poem alot. The only error to me I could find in this poem was

"But the pain she ignore"

I would change it to

"But the pain she ignores"

Other then that minor mistake I found this to be interesting. I really liked the 3 line stanzas they were quite effective and neat. The last stanza was my favorite because you ended this piece so well. All together this was quite a good read. Well done~mel

You are geting beter as i keep reading...THis was a sad poem but i liked it...it was very deep...
One Heart had been shot
Leaving a hole in her chest
My fav. lines^^^^Keep it up

This was good. kinda hard to read aloud though. :/ but other than that keep up the work 5/5

It painted a clear picture, I could see the shot. IT was beautiful but sad too. I really enjoyed it. 5/5 Keep up the good work

First, "But the pain she ignore", it should be "ignores, or ignored". Besides that it was a nice poem. You created great iimagery.

marcella

Wow this is really deep...i can feel the pain in the poem....i like it..5/5

The first and the 4th lines are absolutely one of the best ones I've ever heard. Great work!

This is great. you start the piece with really powerful imagery and just go from there. Again the simple language really suits this piece. i love it
DnB