Laura,
This is a truly brilliant poem! The words you chose to describe this piece of art were excellent, and all I can say is "wow!". I always love to see how people tie off their poem, and your ending saw superb.

"By the time morning arrives
It seems like years
No rest for me
As I awake with fresh tears"

The last line really gave a sense of how this person in the poem feels.
The flow was great, and overall, 5/5!
Keep it up!

With all due respect,
Hatori

A good dark poem

better than my work!!! 5/5

Really strong short sentences! Good job. Just one thing.. maybe you should change the sentence: "as day disappears.." into "as days disappear" =) but it's good this way too ;] anyway, keep it up.
xxxx

Great piece of work...so sad yet so wonderful to read :)

I loved this poem. I think it was very well written and sincere. Excellent job and you have tons of talent. Keep writing.

Hey Laura,
this is a great depressing poem
the flow was awesome and your chose of words was amazing
over all it was a wonderful poem
great job!
5/5
xox Jess

I don’t think the rhythm or the rhyme could be any better. The poem really hit its mark, and I am sure many can relate to these dark feelings All in all this poem is outstanding

Laura,

This was such a stunning success. The overall rhythm and rhymes were quite impeccable; the poetic quality of this work was above reproach; in fact, whether it was mere fictitious or based on fact, it certainly brought into play a series of mental images in my mind. Tormented by nightmares, indeed, isn't a good sign. I haven't read a poem which I thoroughly enjoyed prior to this work. Loved it all the way! 5/5

Take care,
Marian

Hi Laura!

pretty good piece. nice flow and rhyme

Very depressing poem...i loved it!

"The smell of blood
The taste of deceit
A cold body
Burning bruised feet"

that part was amazing!

great poem 5/5

~Michelle~

WOW! beautifly written..great poem..i loved it...keep it up girl!!
5/5

.....:its me:.....

Great poem i wish i could write like you

Wow, what can i say, it was beautifully done. it creates such a strong picture in my mind. great work. 5/5

Terror fills,
The empty heart
Being drowned in tears
Being torn apart

my fave lines ^^ awesome work

Hey,
this is a really good poem..i enjoyed reading it a lot. the emotion is so deep and real.
i especially loved this stanza:
Terror fills,
The empty heart
Being drowned in tears
Being torn apart

REALLY GOOD! but overall the whole poem was great! keep it up!!

Very good!! i loved it!! keep up your poems :) xx

I love your style, your poems flow so well and your choice of words are amazing. You have great potential as a writer, if you ever need any help just let mek now. Excellent work 5/5 GG23

Interesting poem. You describe emotions very well. Atmosphere of this poem is excellent.
Well done,5/5

Wow! truly sad poem, good job, keep it up

Great poem. Nice flow.
Also the rhyming has done great.
My fav part was:
I dislike my dreams
As they despise me
All I can do
Is wish to be free

Very meaningfull.
5/5

Best of wishes
TC