Very nice work really good for a first love poem aswell!

I tried
But I fell

^loved this line the most and I love the poem! 5/5
<3Amber

Its a really good love poem...Really great job for it being your first love poem....

You promise me
You'd never leave
You lied to me
But I still believe
I tried
but I fell
And now
I'm in hell..

^ I really like those lines...So simple but you got the point across....God job 5/5.... =)

Riz,

For your first love poem, I may as well commend the distinct neatness of this piece. The refrain was delightfully engaging, and I liked how you placed fine details of a romantic birth on the second stanza; the rest further helps in wrapping up the whole poem.

"Why does this keep happening to me?
When all I want is a lot of love..."

^Dead right. We human beings naturally desire to love and be loved, indeed. I believe it's just a matter of time, patience, and acceptance. At least I know for certain.

Nice one, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing, m'dear. Take care, Marian

Love is a feeling that inspires everyone. I am glad that finally you are becoming the reason of my inspiration. But I will try to write a funny love poem :)

Your poems is great 5/5

So far, this is my favorite oem of yours. You have really wonderful love poem here. Truly a beautiful piece. The structure is nice and neat acompanied by a great flow, which makes this a wonderful read.5/5

marcella

Well it was a good love poem, I think you should write more love poems m'dear =)

Anyway I like the repetition in it. Flow is a little rocky but it's okay..

Just a suggestion to add more punctuations in it :)

Keep up the good work!

This was cute.
Yet the emotion did not come out fully. Love poems are meant for that, I suggest to add adjectives, to over exaggerate on your meanings, leave metaphors for us to wonder about. Don't be so straight to the point, fiddle with words. Write your poetry like a mosaic. Use all your emotions, describe them, set them out. And let us look at it, and make us wonder.
The poem was really cute in all,
just try to describe more.
You did great!