Time bomb

You have some really good ideas, and I have to say that the way you type the poem out draws you in (one line one word, next line two). It definitely helps the reader feel the words better.
I only suggest you proof read the poem, make sure it's going out to us the exact way you want it (i.e. misspellings, ect.).

Good work, I'm looking forward to seeing what else you come up with.