I really enjoyed reading this poem, I thought it was a little short and you may have gotten a bit more out of a longer poem. I still enjoyed the poem and I thought it was very sweet and heartfelt, yet so sad at the same time. Excellent work 5/5 GG23

I LiKED THiS POEM iS WAS NiCE

I LiKED THiS POEM iS WAS NiCE

A bit enigmatic but i love everything you write so thumbs up

Aww..kinda sad in the end. but still great!
good job!! =]
--Viola

Aww, this was adorable.
I love the emotion and the flow was perfect.
Great job!
5/5
((Amber))

This poem is so sad, yet beautifully written.
My favorite stanza is:
-She gracefully took it
So together they walked
The moment they looked
Their eyes were locked-
I like the flow of the whole piece.
Well done, 5/5 from me

Wow....loved it

Ur a great poet
keep up the gr8 writes
hopw to read more soon
tk care
bree

Ohh.... MACHINE GUN. Great emotion at the end of the poem, it feels as if you were actually the person, which I can hardly feel in most. 5/5

I loved the poem. I also liked the way you ended it:
He left her
Walking alone
But this time she was walking
With nothing to own

Great one! 5/5
Keep it up.

Awww what a sad yet lovely poem! It's truly touching. Even though she didn't have much, she offered it to him, but he ripped it up and tore her apart. Very emotional and well written.
5/5
Ciao

Wow. i mean WOW. that was beautiful. i kept wondering what the bag was for and the ending was so sad. <333