Personally, I can relate to this poem.It was full of emotion&heartache.The smooth was smooth&nearly flawless.Excellently written!I love it!5/5^_^

<3Amber

Wow.. very strong. i liked this very much. i know the feeling cause me and my dad have that kind of relationship.. i love this poem. 5/5

A strong poem, good ending. Maybe go over the wording and change a few things for rhythms sake. I liked this poem because if flowed, even in places where it seemed like it shouldnt.

I haven't experienced this one but i can feel the emotions screaming in each words in your poems..it was really sad and painful!I like this a lot!! Keep it up

Awhh wow this was super sad. and it almost made me cry. and angel likes it too. lol but yeah this is one of my favorites i think. 5/5 definetly

That was greatly written poem, with alot of emotion in it, as always you have done a great job..........
keep it up dear and a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it

I didn't particularly feel satisfied with the overall development of the poem. The beginning and the rest were much more compelling than the ending. Further, certain technical errors (e.g. punctuations, grammar, etc.) need to be corrected over time. But then, again...

The idea of a cruel father denying the existence of his offspring captured my heart, nevertheless. The emotions portrayed on the poem was apparently touchy, poignant, and quite insightful. I hope this poem will reach out to others as well.

Nice one, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian

This is a very sad poeom so well written it touched my heart in so many ways

Wow its like i saw the story unfolding before me it was really good i think this is one of your best ones out of the ones i read great job this whole poem was perfect a well deseerved 5/5

laura

Wow, this was a fantastic poem. You did great, your words, your flow everything. I feel myself crying, this was an amazing poem. You did fantastic, i can't even explain my emotions right you. I loved the part that said
"She screams,"why do i deserve this treatment?
Damn it what have i done?
Its really not my fault,
That you didn't have a son."

That part made me really sink into your poem, you did great. I felt it reached out to me, not many writers on this site have done that. Great job!!

A strong emothional poem with very good flow this one really gets you thinking and you just dont want to stop reading. 5/5

Thats such a sad poem! but very well written i really like it, it was full of emotion

Mmm a harsh response to abuse that happens on homes. I can understand the trouble you may be having with your father, I have the same. It's a feeling of never being good enough.
I have a feeling flow could have been better. But all in all a touching poem.

Greta

Very sad and touching poem. It's tragic that things like this still happens in this so-called "civilized world" good job

I can relate to this poem beyond reason
I love this one MY FAVORITE
5/5

~Mz.Raven

p.s not one im sposed to be commenting butim happy i did. ADDING U TO FAVORITE AUTHORS

This is touching, very sad and dark, filled with emotions. The ending is heart- breaking, but very effective, it adds extra greatness to the whole piece.
5/5

Great poem, very well written, emotions and feelings very nicely portrayed, flow is very good as well.

another 5/5 for you :) Well done.

Excellently penned. I loved it from start to finish. Your flow was most impressive,and the quotes made it more heartfelt. Superb job. I'll be reading more of your poetry.

It was beautiful well written and sad all at the same time i shed a tear in the last stanza 5/5 for a truly incredible piece of work

This is really sad. Its emotional and actually quite harsh how someone could be so cruel to there own child. You have an amazing talent.
Love Tara-Kay