It was short and beautiful. You conveyed the message along greatly. It was really nice.

Good start you got there...i could feel the love and the descriptions were nice. Just make sure you proofread cause in the last line it looks like a word is missing or miss spelled. Keep up the good work!

The last line is a bit hard to understand at its beginning. But the thought is well presented. Nice job.

Wow. i loved it, it was beautiful. the way you expressed it was truly amazing. 5/5