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Did you notice...
we both capitalize at random moments in our poetry?

This loss could sink the ocean but I'm sure,
we're wearing thin and caving in,

woweeee.....

another great read

"we're wearing thin and caving in"

i love that line for some reason, it just flow(ed?) perfectly and gave it this umph..if that makes any sense---i love the style that you used, its very raw and not so generic

Hi laura!
iloveyou

Great work,was very powerful
keep it up

I love this poem!!!!

Wow that's so sad & sweet..and the title is very catchy.Good work!:)

0_0 this ones awesome...but laura honey what happened u never write anymore we miss u : (

This reminds me of Ian's poetry somehow. But anyways, I think it's beautifully writen once again. You have a way with words that makes each poem so meaningful. And surely those metaphors add such vivid colours to it. Each line in itself is so powerful and holds such deep emotion. I can really feel this one. It does something to my heart.

"These words weren't written for rhythm;
they're just as bad as they sound,
because I've never felt distance like dysfunction.
the repetition isn't easy and I'm beginning to find,
that it's more a curse that i can read your mind."
^That beginning drew me in and it kept my attention all the way to the end. Another amazing poem. Keep it up! =]
--Viola