This is truly a greatly written poem that shows alot of emotions, you have showed that you are a great writer and so talented. keep it up.

Dwelling to a temporary world I can possess
And escape the real one that had forsaken me
Coz I know there I can find happiness
And for the mean time forget agony.

i really adore this stanza, so greatly written

a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

The ending ties this all together! this poem was really neat i dont know how else to put it but it is a 5/5

I think no matter what at the end of the day we're all dreamers, dreamers of something better. Fantastic poem - great imagery and flow 5/5 GG23

I liked the expressions of a dreamer all along the poem..I liked the sorrowful feeling and words

My fave lines are;

Dwelling to a temporary world I can possess
And escape the real one that had forsaken me

It's really true these lines you captured

Keep it up,
Laura

Lovely poem, good flow you say very clearly how you are thinking and there felling of sorrow comes across very clearly.

It is nicely written. Though it doesn't particularly capture my interest for the fact that it isn't correlated with own case, I still enjoy the fact that you portray your theme in such a hopeless manner that makes it fairly engaging to read. With its conclusion, the poem gives the readers a clue of the character's end: doomed to failure. But then, again... aren't we all dreamers? aren't we living in a dream, and/or a dream within a dream? Life is but an illusion, whereas it's about maintaining balance in every respect--even in the gap of reality and fantasy.
Just my thoughts anyway. That's how provocative your work is. Well, at least it manage to provoke thoughts out of me. Thanks for sharing.

Aww luvly words and nice flow to it all :)

Excellent poem.
Sad.
The rhyming was excellent
The flow was flawless.
It was nicely written.
Very deep && detailed.
It captured me as a reader.
&& I enjoyed reading it.

Keep it up && Take care!

-Shannon<3

Its sweet i especially liked:
Hoping that I can stay there forever
More than a fantasy created by my head
But I know I'm just a dreamer
And I know this dream will soon be dead

from this one piece i can already tell you re a talented poet its kinda sad but in away its kind of inspirational i gave it 5/5

Its ok to dream, nothing wrong with it at all, I think all of us do it.... Some of those dreams we can fulfill and others we can not.... so keep on dreaming, not all of them are dead.... I liked this write, powerful, sad and sends out a good message.

Wow i loved it the description and transition 5/5 well done

Wow... You know, I really really liked this piece. I can just connect to it in so many ways, escaping the harsh world to your dreams where you can do anything... Yes, I can definitely connect to that. Great job hun, 5/5 <3

~Loveless Nights~

Another fine written piece by you.. I think the flow was smooth, good job. What I don't like in this poem is.. the rhyming in the end.. I think it was a little 'force'

But. the message in the ending is really great.
Kepe up the good work!

Not exactly leavin me speachless...but its a pretty damn good poem!!! 4/5! i love the last line.

Your poem said alot to me. I now know Im not the only one who drifts into the thoughts in my head. The only place where Im not judged or casted out for being who I am and how I feel.
I thank you and hope to soon write my own thoughts. Continue on your writing.

Another great poem from you....its amazing.. alot of emotion and this is true for alot of people ..

the flow is perfect and the rhyme is perfect also.no need for improving on this.5/5

Wonderful, fantastic, original, heartwarming, talent filled. Great job, this was amazing. I loved it from beginning to end!!

You described what it's like being a dreamer well. How dreams and fantasies make people happy but sooner or later reality comes it and kills it. It has an inspiring meaning.

Wow this one is my favourite I guess.
I can relate to this, it's nice to live in a imaginary world sometimes since the real world has so many ugly things.
Again i would have changed the coz here as wel,but i think it's like a stop word to you and stop words are hard to let go i guess.

"Hoping that I can stay there forever
More than a fantasy created by my head
But I know I'm just a dreamer
And I know this dream will soon be dead"

Yes and then you realise you have to go back to the reality world again...
wow, wow i LOVED this.

5/5

xo take care

angelique