Comments : Ex's and Oh's

  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    Wow.
    I loved this peice.
    The emotion was so strong and your flow was flawless.
    I can feel the pain with every word.
    Great job.
    5/5

    XxAmberxX

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A very nicely written heartfelt poem which showed great emotions, keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    It was a beautiful poem Ciao xD I didn't notice that it was long lol. Anyway I really like the way you repeated this stanza:

    So she signs her letters with Ex's and Oh's -
    Trying so hard, yet everyone knows.
    They know she's hurting but they just don't care,
    She is forced to live her life on a prayer.
    ^^ I think it was very effective.

    Keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I frikken LOVE this!
    This is amazing...I don't even know what to say...
    Each piece you post just gets better and better and you never to fail to amaze me with your work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    0MG0SH! you're poems are so long. hehe ^_^.

    Anyway, this was another great one. Wondefully written with an excellent choice of words and use of vocab. I loved the repetition and the flow and rhyming in this poem is amazing.
    A well deserved 5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Viola

    Wow! I was really impressed by this piece Ciao. I absolutely LOVE it! the emotion in it is so deep and real..i could feel the pain all through out the poem. your choice of words is beautiful. over all this such a sorrowful but an amazing poem..it really touched me.
    great work! =]
    --Viola

  • 16 years ago

    by LovelyDivine

    This was great. I love it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Wow...you did a really great job on this poem the way you wrote it kept me reading 5/5 <33

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I could have SWORN I`d already commented on this one lol, I`ve read it so many times but yet couldn`t find mine there, so here ya go now lol...I think this has won on like 3 of my contests now hahaha, never get sick of this, never ever..seriously I thought I commented this?! lol `tis bugging me nowww. :[

    5.5
    :]
    heartchuu.

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "There's this sad love song that everyone knows -
    The words, the melody; it's quite sad and slow.
    The pain-filled chorus is like a long-held sigh -
    Each word just trying to prolong the inevitable goodbye."

    A great introduction, really gives the reader a clear thought of what's going on. Nice job!

    "It's just like a black and white movie from years past -
    Each of them trying so hard to make love last;
    But life throws curves balls and sometimes, you're out,
    You're stuck all alone with tears cast about."

    Such true and thoughtful words, nice simile in the first line, this is an amazing piece!

    "So she signs her letters with Ex's and Oh's -
    Trying so hard, yet everyone knows.
    They know she's hurting but they just don't care,
    She is forced to live her life on a prayer."

    How heartfelt and moving this is, I love how you repeat this stanza later in the poem too, that was a great idea!

    "Goodbye, My Love." is about all she could say -
    It wasn't her fault that she had to walk away.
    With tears down her cheeks, she takes a last glance -
    Her one last shot at an almost romance."

    Such emotion is falling out of every line, your flow is fantastic and your rhyming is flawless to me from start to finish.

    "You watch her, counting each step that she takes;
    Wishing and willing her to see this mistake.
    But in a few minutes, she's disappeared from sight,
    As you crumble to the ground, too heartbroken to fight."

    Good descriptions, this is really eye-catching.

    "She's settled down now, in a place far away -
    Her mind keeps traveling back to that day.
    The day she was forced to leave her love behind -
    Now she can't get the thought of him from her mind."

    Very clear images here, she can't seem to let the thought fall off.

    "The letters she writes you are filled with such sorrow -
    You are never sure if she will live for tomorrow.
    She's fighting a war no one was meant to fight -
    You know it is wrong, but to her, it is right."

    Awww...this is so hearbreaking and deep, nice work.

    "The fighting she's seeing is nothing compared
    To the nights all alone when she's cold and she's scared.
    She could never tell you what she's really feeling;
    So she prays to God that somehow, you are dealing."

    Excellent wording, this is really touching my heart.

    "One day, hopefully soon, she'll be back in your arms -
    Away from the fighting and away from all harm;
    But for now, she's lost to the world no one really knows -
    As she signs her last letter with Ex's and Oh's."

    You really have the reader wanting more by the end, but you sum it up nicely. I absoluetly adored the rhyming....5/5 from me, take care and keep it up!

  • 15 years ago

    by Not Enough

    I love this poem! From th first stanza you caght my attention. There's so much emotion in it! It's very well written, and has a great rhyme scheme. When some poems rhyme they get kind of off topic, or it just doesn't make sense because they're like forced rhymes. But you're use of words worked so well in this poem! Excellent 5/5

    Soda