This is a very powerful poem with a lot of emotion I really like your style and I am intending on reading more of your work. Iâ€™m not sure what to write because this poem has left me speechless it really is very powerful.
No offence against you but only positive points :). Though the poem is really long, you kept it cohesive and the way words strung makes it really coherent to the content and the caption. Well deserved 5/5 :)
You know, you really have a way with words, and I can relate to the best part of this poem, especially the self harm and alcohol abuse. The emotion in strong, and whats more, there is a message amongst your words. Loved it.
It's pretty good. Some of the rhyming was off in some parts an I found a punctuation mistake but it was pretty good. I love the last line. :) I'm just happy that I found myself before I did any of this. I don't even like the taste of alchohol so I won't even be drinking when it's legal. I just don't like it. I'll give it a four. I like the story line and the title was unique.
Excellent poem. One of the best I've ever read on this site. I must admit when I first looked at the poem I found the length a little daunting but I'm glad I read it. This poem is filled with so much deep emotions and is very true. I can't relate to all of it but I can relate to some and I think you described what some teens go through very well. I think its amazing how you kept the flow so flawless all the way through. You have so much talent. I also loved how in the last two stanzaz you said you went through the things too.
This is an amazing poem. I have never read anything like it (in a good way, of course.) I love the rhyming and the flow was good too. And of course its great that theres a message behind it. 5/5
Lie about inner feelings, pretend all is well
Don't let anyone know you're headed to hell
LOVE these lines ^^^^^^^
I thought this was definitly a powerful poem. I loved how you took your situation and turned it into a flawless peice, that can help other's understand and grasp what you went through.
I really enjoyed reading this.
This poem had to be one of the BEST poems I have ever read on this site...it just oozed with so much powerful emotion and spoke to every teen in this world...it was scary in the fact that people do really do this but hopefully those people take the time to read this wonderful poem and it will also change their life around...AMAZING!
To be honest I don't like this poem too much. Topic is good and message too but I personally don't like some parts because I love metaphors in the poems and I hate when someone use same words many times in one piece. Sorry, this is just my opinion, but I don't like it.
I'm envious. (:
That was by far one of the best poems that I have ever read on this site. Everything about it was perfect. The flow was flawless, the emotions were strong, & it was just perfect. :P Overall: 5.5 Fabulous job.
--- Stephanie Lynn .+.
&& Thx for the comment on my poem, it means a lot to me. (: Oh, by the way... this poem has earned a spot on my favorites. ;]
This poem literally brought tears to my eyes because I was also trapped at point one time too.I've done two of those things.I overcame one but the other is still nagging at me. Hopefully one day I will overcome them all.Sometimes I'm scared to ask for help because I don't want to feel like I am a burden to someone else.I don't want to weigh anybody else down with my pitiful little problems.This poem is amazing.It is going to be the fist poem to go on my favorites list.I thank you for writting this poem.I give you a 5/5 for sure!!Keep up the amazing writting.