A very intense poem, with a lot of emotion and some very vivid imagery.

I disagree...I think it was beautiful!! Tons of emotion and i could picture ur storyline in my head with ur descriptivness.....very god job.

I love how descriptive it was..it draws a picture in your mind...great job!=]

Its soo beautiful! Dont listen to Dead Soul it was a great poem, many KUDOS!

This is incredible! Such a deep enticing poem on all levels!

Wow..iam speechless...
good work!!

Ok, this poem, totally hot.
i could relate to most of it which made it enjoyable.
well written.
and it totally kept my attention.
good job

Awwwww.... That is a great poem right there!! You put so much emotion in it, it is so sweet!!!!! 5/5

I like the imagery in this poem. But you have some errors in this piece, some sentences need to have punctuations. Also I think to improve this poem you should work with the structure of it.

Anyway the poem was filled with deep emotions. Good job on writing this one! I look forward in reading more from you.

Thanks for commenting on my poem.