Deep poem, I would have liked it more if it were a bit longer, would have more feel to it.

This is a good poem...it's probably make a good song too..although if you do turn it into a song its probably gonna need some adding onto you know.

but the poem is good..flowed nicely and rhymed good.5/5 from me=]

Amazing poem, very sad and deep. I like the ending very unique, but I thought that the second to last line broke the flow a little, maybe if you shorten it a little bit. Great work though, keep it up.

Great poem,very deep with emotions.I loved how you ended it.And I'm sure it will make a good song.A 5/5 from me.Keep up the great work
Miranda

This was quite a deep piece. I think it's a good poem but would be an even better song once you added a chorus and ect. I liked how it ended quite nicely might I add. It was unique and I didn't expect it. It changed quite quickly in contrast. Nice flow, simple and effective. Well done. Keep up the good work.~Mel

I thought this was deep poem, and it was very good, and unexpected, but it was very well written, it was penned great, and i think it will make a great song, 5/5

Stephanie Naylor

Amazing although there are some edits i think would make it flow better
"And no place to call my home
I have a tail thats long and thin
With a point at the end"

i think it would flow better as
"And no place to call home
I have a tail thats long and thin
With a point upon the end"

but that is just how i saw it.
5/5

The I have I watch ect.
That got a little to repetitive
try to take those out
it makes the poem sound
a lot better
5/5
kaila

Very nice,itll be a great song!

I think this would make a wonderful song! I really liked all the descriptive words. The flow was pretty good, but I bet it was sound better as a song. Awsome job!

Cayce xx

Wow. Amazing. The beginning really drew me in. And this piece was very nicely written and well thought out. :] And you ended it really well. The last line was. .unforgettable. :] 5/5.

Deep poem, well written, the last line.. wooooweeee. i like that, you went out with a bang :] the start of the poem just shouts at you to READ ME!