by Sachi Aug 27, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
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Walking past with a smile on his face, |
by x Mo x
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That was very good. It started out sweet and sensitive and then seemed to take a slight turn in feelings. When you said "sexy" in the seventh stanza second line, it made the poem seem less romantic and more...something else. I really enjoyed it all though. I liked how it didnt rhyme, but it still sounded very poetic. Great job! |
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Very long poem yet so meaningful and touching and well written...keep it up... |