Comments : Diamond In The Sand

  • 16 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    Oh this was great.Each stanza was well written.Oh and I love the title.Good choice of words.
    Take care

  • 16 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Gem,

    This was great. Loved the word and choices in your phrasing. And As it has been said before, that's how love hits sometimes. It just pops up out of nowhere and knocks you over.

    You are trully one of the lucky ones who finds it and holds tight to the reigns.

    Wonderful Job

    Always,
    Jeannie

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessie

    I like ur poem alot your a good writer

  • 16 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    "Finding love in this lonely world
    Was like finding a needle in a haystack"

    This really touched me the most because it is so deep and so true! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Beautifully written love poem, with great imagery and good choice of words. You expressed emotions in it excellently. The ending is very captivating and effective (the last stanza)
    My favorite stanza is:

    -Something that just wasn't worth the effort
    The countless disappointments
    The tears...
    The hurt...
    Weighing down the fragile heart
    When something that felt like love
    Turned out to be a sham
    A red herring-

    Well done, 5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Awehh..I loved this ! The poem was full of imagery, especially the first stanza..and it really was written well. Love is very hard to find, and you have written out that journey well lol, glad you got him !

    5.5
    :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Cheyanne

    Wow im not one for poems that don't rhyme....but you exspressed this so beautifully and i love the message you gave out...by the end of the poem i got goosebumps and not a lot of poems do that for me....well this one is definetly going to my favourites...keep up the great work your doing great 5/5:)

  • 16 years ago

    by Deana

    I love the sincerety that radiates from this poem,a real tribute to that special person in your life, this must make him very happy, great write Gem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Gem
    Beautiful piece. Your love shines through your words in this write.

    But even pipe dreams can become a reality
    Love can find you when you least expect it
    When you cease looking
    It springs out of nowhere
    Like a long lost friend
    A best friend
    A lover

    You know I am a believer in true love and I know like me you have found that :)
    Excellent!
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Lenny

    Thats gorgeous :)
    great poem

  • That was soooo well written. Great poem, keep up the good work :) Just beautifully written. I like it...

  • 16 years ago

    by moonlil

    Wow, that's an absolutely amazing and beautiful poem! I love it. It's so true.. Good job! Take care and keep on writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Amazing Gem! So glad for you to write again. This piece was different than your others, but amazing with it's metaphors and comparisons...good flow to it too. Sometimes with free verse, I too, find it hard on how to break up the words into stanzas, but you did it beautifully! Great job!
    I LOVED this line
    Nailing jelly to a tree

    How amazing in imagery that was. Plus, it was original and sort of funny and sweet! Just perfect!
    Charisma*

  • 16 years ago

    by oh baby please

    Two thumbs up amazing

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    As always your poems are amazing! :) That guy must be really lucky to have you :) I really love the 1st two lines in this poem.. I think it really grabs the reader's attention :)
    What I also love in this poem is the title :) it really is beautiful..

    5/5 as always.
    Please keep writing!
    Thanks for the comment :)

  • 16 years ago

    by withlove

    Love it! very well written and i agree with all that was said

  • 16 years ago

    by Kalee nichole

    I loved this poem...its kinda like the one i wrote "love is real"...check it out please...but yea i loved this poem (especially the parts "Nailing jelly to a tree" and "When you cease looking
    It springs out of nowhere
    Like a long lost friend" because i love it when that happens). you always have great poems...kepp them coming

  • 16 years ago

    by Avellana

    I was smitten with 'nailing jelly to a tree'

    *smiles* :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Kirsten Fromer

    I know exactly how you feel...I foun my needle in the haystack to!! He's amazing and we're soooo in love!! Well done! Please comment on one of my poems to!

    Kirsten

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    HOLY CRAP

    I love this!
    This is amazing...I don't usually go for non rhyming poems, but you managed to completely captivate me with this...beautiful!