Death upon true love

It could be little longer and you could use some metaphors that will create stronger atmosphere. Anyway nice poem, I like the category you chose for your first piece. It is very interesting.

Awww...hunn you did a great job of putting your emotions into this you did a wonderful job writing this poem 5/5 <33

one suggestion: dont make the poem a paragraph seperate it like this
I took the black rose u gave me
upon our first date
i couldn't figure out why
cause its the sign of death
but i took it anyways,
the thorns stuck in to me
like burning needles
at what i thought was the pain of saying i love you
but it came to be the pain of death,
upon my last dieing word....
ILL NEVER FORGET