Very vivid. great job, keep it up

your servant:
david

AWESOME POEM!!

I love this...the imagery and power in this poem were breathtaking. the flow was good throughout and the whole piece had me gripped from start to finish. there was only one slight problem i found with this and that was that there seemed to be a lot of filler words (I you and etc) try eliminating some of those and you'll find the flow gets even better. again, this is beautiful.

Absolutely Fantastic!!!

WOW!

Great powerful words used in this poem!

5/5

Danielle
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Oh thank you very much! :)