IN LOVE WITH A STRANGER

by sexymama   Sep 18, 2007


WHO R U IS THE QUESTION THAT NEEDS TO BE ANSWERED.

THERE I WAS SITTING ON A BENCH IN THE PARK WHEN I SAW HIM.

NEVER IN MY LIFE WOULD I THINK I'LL STAND BEFORE HIM.

WATCHING U FROM A DISTANCE WATCHING ME WAITING ON U TO APPROACH ME.

AS U WALKING SLOWLY TOWARDS ME MY EYES WONDER ON THE BEAUTIFUL BODY THAT I SEEK.

YOUR BARE CHEST FILLED WITH SWEAT, FANNING MYSELF TAKING DEEP BREATHES.

EIGHT PACK ABS I WANT TO CARESS, LETTING ME TAKE AWAY ALL YOUR STRESS.

FINALLY HE COMES UP TO ME HOPEING THE FIRST THING HE'LL SAY "WILL U MAKE LOVE TO ME", BUT ALL U DO IS SAY, HI.

LETTING MY SMILE TURN INTO A FROWN.

LEAVING ME THERE WITHOUT A CONVERSATION NOT EVEN A HUG, SAYING TO MYSELF "I THINK I'M IN LOVE".

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  • 17 years ago

    by David

    The poem itself is self explanatory. I love these kind of poems., and you came across explain your emotions and feeling very well.
    A few things I would change.
    I would get rid of the caps. It's hard to read, and caps are often used to express "yelling" or "anxiousness."
    Watch your voice. you start off by talking to him (whether it's in your head or whispering) then on the next line you start narrating. Then you switch again. this can be done, and you almost pulled it off, but in my opinion you switched a little bit to much and to sudden.
    Well keep writing.. you look like you have a passion for it. Write me if you need advice or help, or to tell me to sthu. :)
    ~David

  • 17 years ago

    by pLeASeTakEMyHeArT

    Interesting to read this but it's good, tho.

  • 17 years ago

    by isaiah

    U paint a picture like Tupac

  • 18 years ago

    by sexymama

    THANKS YOUR SWEET

  • 18 years ago

    by Blake

    Very nice i liked it alot and keep up the good work =] 5/5

    -blake

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